12 October 2011

Lost

.
Harvest moon
hanging low
tell me where
I ought to go.
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Better as two lines?  Part of something bigger?  As is?
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  1. Dreaming in the ClearThursday, October 13, 2011 at 10:59:00 PM CDT

    Better as is than as two lines, I think. I couldn't offer an opinion about something bigger, not without seeing it. It's spare but it works as is. It might be better as part of something bigger... Or perhaps not...?

    And the title puzzles me - Why is the post titled lost?

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  2. The Moon in AutumnFriday, October 14, 2011 at 12:47:00 AM CDT

    Because that's the title? (I am always willing to accept title suggestions, for they are not my strong suit. :)

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  3. Dreaming in the ClearFriday, October 14, 2011 at 10:18:00 PM CDT

    I'm wondering why is the title lost if the moon is telling you where to go... But...

    Now that I think about it again, that's not as contradictory as I was thinking it was. So, nevermind.

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  4. The Moon in AutumnSunday, October 16, 2011 at 1:21:00 AM CDT

    All comments and questions are certainly welcome. :)

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