14 October 2011

The view in winter

from my third floor apartment
the view will be lovely

stark and leafless

branches against
the skies in winter

Any comments/suggestions about line breaks?


  1. Gorgeous! Great line endings.

    Consider swapping the first two lines, because when I read it, my brain thinks the title is the first line, and then when I get to the third line, I have to backtrack a little.